The Phantom’s lair… some sort of labyrinth. My dear please come, really please do. I’m surely not going to hurt you. Don’t mind those bones or the mice that sit upon my throne. It has been neglected for years along with the old, old organ that used to accompany me with me wondrous music of the night. I have rather forcefully brought you here and I ever so politely invite you to sit upon my throne… we have some things to discuss.
I, the phantom am asking you- forgive me- am demanding * getting louder * that you sing my harmonious music ’till our time together shall end, ever so terribly! I forbid you to see that “insolent boy” Raoul ever again till your time shall end. You must stay with me Christine and we shall share an everlasting passion for each other I demand it! I Promise to delicately take care of you and provide everlasting happiness.
I propose that you not try to escape, my darling, since OUR wondrous cave is riddled with traps to the dark corners who’ve never seen the light- oh- the awful light. It has haunted me for years and I can never seem to escape it. So Christine, what is your decision? stay with me forever or, Escape with only one price… Your life!
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To dylano609
I thought your artical was preatty cool,and good man nice,and I like the picture of the artical
from Aldo
I like how you did the post in the first person of the phantom. I can see him commanding Christine like he did in the story.
I like the point of view you take, the phantoms point of view. He doesn’t think its that big of a deal that there’s mice, and cobwebs, and dust. Seriously think the point of view is cool! First time ive seen it from the phantoms point of view.
I really liked how you started the post, The Phantom talking creepily to Christine. I also liked how you used lines from the actual story like “insolent boy” when he talks about how he despises Raoul. You made it seem similar to the story, giving me that same feeling I got when I read the story in class. Your hook was very good and got me interested in the rest of the post.
My favorite line of the post was, “I propose that you not try to escape, my darling, since OUR wondrous cave is riddled with traps to the dark corners who’ve never seen the light- oh- the awful light.” It reminded me why The Phantom took her down there and why he hates the light so much. I really liked how you gave the eerie feel of the post by writing it in first person. I could hear the voice of The Phantom as he was begging her and yelling at her at the same time. Great job!
“So Christine, what is your decision? stay with me forever or, Escape with only one price… Your life!” This one quote got me at the end because it shows that the Phantom is merciless as well as ruthless. He will take away the life of an innocent girl in both ways because, she will be treated like the Phantom if she stays or she die if she goes. Through this quote you show how the Phantom’s personality shines through those unwelcome words.
“I, the phantom am asking you- forgive me- am demanding * getting louder * that you sing my harmonious music ’till our time together shall end, ever so terribly!” This quote yet again shows how angry and mean the Phantom can truly be. This writing is so cool, I really like it.
I like the tone you set for the phantom, as if he’s just barely holding onto sanity throughout. Another thing i liked was how every so often you would narrate exactly what was happening with asterisks. Good job.